Barefoot Prayers: The Day Looks Dull – A Response

Mark Norman Francis (CC BY-NC 2.0)

Mark Norman Francis (CC BY-NC 2.0)


She knows she has become a blur, a passenger in the window of an express train. Her friends and family have become only glimpses, impressions of people standing on platforms, waving at her as she tears through life.

They’ve started making safety announcements:

Will customers at Mum’s for Lunch please stand clear of the edge. Through train approaching.

The train now approaching Caitlin’s 30th does not stop here. Please stand back.

Stand well away from the edge of Ian and Samantha’s Wedding. The approaching train is not scheduled to stop at this station.

‘Slow down!’ her mother has cried as she’s hurtled by.

‘Can’t,’ she’s called back, the word fading before it’s fully left her mouth. ‘Gotta keep going.’

‘But you’ll crash!’

‘I’ll be fine.’

She knows she has become a blur, but that’s okay; it’s what she wants – because maybe when she finally hits the end of the line, she’ll be so stretched, so thin, so vaporous she won’t feel a thing.


A flash-fiction inspired by The Day Looks Dull by Stephen Cherry (Barefoot Prayers: A Meditation a Day for Lent and Easter)

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4 Responses to Barefoot Prayers: The Day Looks Dull – A Response

  1. g says:

    Very poetic. Loved it!

  2. Susan Cross says:

    I loved this. I saw an art exhibit called “Slow” last year and it was the exact opposite, an SUV in NYC barely moving fast enough to distinguish mobility. Seeing every expression on every face in the crowd without the crowd seeing through the darkened windows of the vehicle. Eventually it sped up to a point where people were moving but the concept that came to me was that the world would stop, just stop, not hit a wall coming to a stop. Both your story and the film will stay with me.

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  4. Clara Zane says:

    It’s one way to keep life from getting its harshest licks in. Good story!

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